Scary October #26

About the only thing scary about today’s post is the number of times I used the word ‘look’ in one of my WIPs  – and maybe this photo!

Matt over at wantoncreation has tagged me for the Look Challenge. I’d seen various other bloggers do this as well, so thought this would be rather fun to try, myself. The challenge requires me to use the ‘find’ feature of my word processor to search for the word ‘look’ in a chosen manuscript in progress, then copy and paste a few srrounding paragraphs. Since I’ve been talking a lot about my books, I thought maybe I’d share a bit of what I have started on the next one in the series, a story I have tentatively called ‘Revolution’, set roughly 25 years after the end of ‘Spirit Quest’ when Michelle has a daughter of her own.

I’m a little embarrassed to admit how many times I used the word ‘look’ – telling, instead of showing – but it is a WIP in its infancy, so I know this is one of the things I’ll catch in editing. Without further ado, here are three instances of the ‘tell, don’t show’:

1) I think it’s all just a phony story to keep me from going to the concert. Well, it’s not going to work! I have some money from babysitting. I’ll go buy the ticket myself!

I stuck the arrowhead in my sock drawer.

I could tell by the look on her face that Mom was disappointed in me for not being drawn into her fantasy. Well, I didn’t care. I stormed out of the house, stalking the neighbourhood streets to work off some of my anger and frustration. My ‘Sweet Sixteen’ was supposed to be the best birthday, ever. Instead, all I got was a chunk of rock.

2) “So, how did this arrowhead transport her back in time? Supposedly,” Savannah added when she saw the look on my face.

“She did something she called the ‘withershins’. She said it refers to a ritual where one runs three times around a church at midnight. The friends she tried it with said they might meet the devil or be transported to the Netherworld. Mom claims that running counter-clockwise sends you back in time, clockwise will bring you back to your own time. Pretty far-fetched, eh?”

“Actually, I have heard of that, some kind of urban legend, but it does sound pretty wild, all right,” Savannah agreed.

“As far as I’m concerned, it’s a load of bunk,” I pouted.

The kitchen inside the St. Boniface Museum

3) “You are hurt,” the Abbé observed. “Come. The sisters will attend to your injuries.”

I nodded, not willing to say anything more at the moment. He invited me inside the large two-storey structure, which looked suspiciously like the old St. Boniface Museum. Before stepping in, I took a quick glance towards the river. Bishop Taché, he’d said. The street that followed along this side of the river was named for the man – a street that did not exist, yet, I noticed. There was only a mud trail.

Hope you enjoyed this little insight into the next segment of what I think of as my ‘Red River Adventure’ series. Now, I have to challenge a few of YOU! The following are those that I haven’t tagged for anything yet or, at least, not for awhile, so here you are – if you dare!  (hehehe, evil cackle!)

Ravena Guron

eternal Domnation

The Eagle’s Perspective

Wings of Wonder

Stories About My Life, 92% True

You should all pop over to see what they’ve been doing, lately. 🙂

In other news, over a month ago, (I’m ashamed to say), Storyteller In The Digital Age sent me another Liebster Award, which I will address tomorrow. Sorry about the delay, Amanda. Since I’ve dedicated this month to members of my writer’s group and have consistently had excerpts on Fridays, following up with interviews on Sunday, I thought this challenge would take precedence over the Liebster Award. My ‘look’ excerpts today will reflect my character interview on Sunday. Since no one else from the writer’s group responded to my interview/excerpt requests, I thought I would interview my character, Michelle, from my first two books. I’m still trying to decide if I should interview her as if she had just returned from her adventures in the first two books, or if I should interview her as the mother of Kristen, who will be the main character in my next book.

What do you think? Should I interview the teenaged Michelle or Michelle, 25 years later?

12 comments on “Scary October #26

  1. I keep meaning to mention that I also have an arrowhead like the Talisman. I found it on my one and only trip to America, a lovely man took me out Indian Rock hunting with him and I found several, one is a particularly beautiful black one that he told me was probably used for hunting small game. I love it and it is so very special that it was made many years ago by an native American that I am quite overwhelmed when I handle it.

    In answer to your question I think it would be lovely to do a mother and daughter interview 🙂

    • That is very cool, Diane, having found yours while out Indian Rock hunting. Mine is just one I picked up at the living museum’s gift shop. I also picked up one made of obsidian. It’s beautiful. I’m certain yours means much more to you because you found it and it has history behind it. 🙂

      A mother and daughter interview might be interesting. Thanks for the suggestion. 🙂

  2. Interesting excerpts! I have a few arrowheads somewhere–smaller than the one pictured, but your writing reminded me of them.

    Thank you for the tag. 🙂

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